a poem i wrote today "Bleak and Elysian Tears", please comment Options

[LostInMyKryptoni...]

been a little depressed so i threw this poem together

Bleak and Elysian Tears

There are so many things, that I’ve never had
And there are so many things, which have never made me glad
the one tear that’s creeping, down my sorrowful cheek
It leaves an invisible line, that’s wet and bleak
as it passes and lands, on the wet ground below
Silently the blue tears, start forming and flow
as memories of the past, come flooding in
Fast and colder the blue tears begin
As I come up to emotion, that’s never been said
My hearts ripped out, and my blood is shed
as I remember times, when I’d actually smile
The bleak line on my cheek, becomes a violent Nile
it’s so hard to remember the terms of my past
Because most of my smiles never really would last
I kept on thinking those things would change
But they never did and I became more deranged
As my tears begin to slow, and the pain is withdrawn
I leave everything, buried in the forest of foregone
There are so many things, that I’ve always had
Just never saw the truth, the friends that made me glad

- by LeKeyshia Marie Richardson

[lovescream]

aww the poem was good.
I hope you feel better with whatever you're depressed about.

[heyyfrankie]

i like the ending.
+++++++++
get better, okay?

[LostInMyKryptoni...]

Thanks i'm glad you all like it, and i get this way because of this time of the year, went through the worst and longest relationship last year this time and it ended badly, and now that i've moved away it doesn't bother me so much, but i still see all the couples holding hands and it makes me sad because i want that someone special...just havn't found him yet....

[ApocalypseAelis]

I love it. Good job.

[sikdragon]

Well, it 's the lessons we learn.

Everybody takes things for granted.
no one can appreciate everything.

Quit relying on people for your happiness.
And learn to better articulate the feeling of gladness.