"Times like These", Please leave comments |
 Nov 20 2004, 09:16 PM
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 I'm Lost In My Own kryptonite  Group: Member Posts: 59 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 61,556  |
Times Like These
It’s times like these I wonder if I’ll be alright Wither or not I’m prepared To stand alone and fight It just seems like lately Nobody’s by my side Through all the pain I feel In whom do I confide? I have so many things I want to get off my chest Like what is bothering me And memories I want to rest In this world, so lonely and dark I feel as if I’m locked away I try so hard to find myself But I can’t even find my way I get lost and I feel broken It’s those words that you’ve spoken You wont amount to anything So give up on your childish dreams It’s times like these I wonder if I’ll be alright Wither or not I’m prepared To stand Alone, And fight… LeKeyshia Marie Richardson Copyright ©2004 LeKeyshia Marie Richardson |
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Nov 23 2004, 09:33 PM
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catastrophic sweetness Group: Member Posts: 92 Joined: Oct 2004 Member No: 58,334 |
I can totally relate. I like it. You use a good combination of words and it flows.
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Nov 24 2004, 02:04 AM
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I'm Lost In My Own kryptonite Group: Member Posts: 59 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 61,556 |
thank you
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Nov 27 2004, 06:47 PM
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I love you <33333 Group: Member Posts: 2,928 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 30,404 |
ditto. i can totaly relate to that...nice job!
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Nov 27 2004, 06:53 PM
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 ٩(͡๏̯͡๏)۶ Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 14,309 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 65,593 |
wee! i can relate with it alot. mind if i use this and put it on my page. ill put the copyright name on it ^_^
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Nov 28 2004, 01:08 AM
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I'm Lost In My Own kryptonite Group: Member Posts: 59 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 61,556 |
Yeah sure, i dont mind if you use it, and i'm glad u mentioned the copyright, the only thing i dont want is people to take them and call them their own because they are published. but enjoy!
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Dec 3 2004, 11:19 PM
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 Kermit the frog = <3 Group: Member Posts: 2,315 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 15,215 |
wasn't that a song?
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Dec 4 2004, 11:48 AM
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I'm Lost In My Own kryptonite Group: Member Posts: 59 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 61,556 |
yeah there is a song called times like these i belive by the goo-goo dolls, but my poem is totally different.
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Dec 4 2004, 06:59 PM
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 This bitch better work! Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 13,681 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 28,095 |
wow. nice job. it sounds like something we woule read out of my literature book. very good. nice rhyming. ( i love those kinds!
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Dec 4 2004, 10:40 PM
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I'm Lost In My Own kryptonite Group: Member Posts: 59 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 61,556 |
why thank you very much
and who knows maybe one day i will be in a lit book! :-) or at least that's my dream, i have them published now, just need them in a book. lol. i rhyme a little too much...if a poem doesn't rhyme when i right it i get annoyed....lol 
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Dec 6 2004, 12:34 AM
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im so cool.it burns Group: Member Posts: 24 Joined: Dec 2004 Member No: 69,373 |
woah. i think everyone can really relate to that at one point in their life or another. It`s really koolio.
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Dec 6 2004, 05:14 PM
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I'm Lost In My Own kryptonite Group: Member Posts: 59 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 61,556 |
yeah, i relate to it alot, but i'm glad everyone likes it 
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Dec 6 2004, 09:16 PM
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 Yawn Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 9,530 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 65,772 |
Yah it's really good!!! i have a suggestion tho, near the end, like the last couple of lines try to ryhme a lil better. like with the words "anything" trying to rhyme with "dreams' besides that, i think its awesome
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