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I Miss Us, poem
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post Nov 13 2004, 10:55 PM
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"I Miss Us"
I miss the way we used to talk..
The way we laughed and our long walks..
I remember the days since we were five..
Going to school and willing to thrive..

I wonder what happend to those days..
Now we've went our seperate ways..
It seems like we forgot our past..
The past when there was always us..

You were my best friend and I was yours..
I wish that we could have that back..
Because I can't bear but to wonder where you've gone..
It's like I'm the blame for something I've never done..

I miss our friendship and I miss us..

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Rachel
post Nov 14 2004, 07:14 PM
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i've never wanted anything rationale.
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its nice....i suggest try writing something that doesnt have the same rhyme scheme, it can be fun i promise =)
 
swtxcatastrophe
post Nov 15 2004, 07:46 PM
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I liked it, sweet and heartfelt.
 
HelloSunshine
post Nov 18 2004, 01:16 AM
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ooh nice, I wrote two I Miss You poems for my friends....so I know how you feel sad.gif
 
babygrl23
post Nov 20 2004, 11:14 AM
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Omg, I love this poem. Very powerful, and a clear message was sent. I completely know how this feels, because I have been in and out of friendships my whole life.

GREAT JOB!!!!!
 

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