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 Oct 26 2004, 10:00 PM
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 creepy heather  Group: Official Member Posts: 4,208 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 41,580  |
women are evil, sensitive, hypocritcal cute little bastards
thats all i have to say to introduce this poem  The scar on my waist leads you around In existential maneuvers I say I’m not afraid To bleed all over you I tell you, now with my hand clasped over your mouth, How I gave up half my life for us And now I bleed from being torn So, taste my tear-stained lips As I hum, Giving you a pleasant tingle But maybe those are moans of agony Whatever, you have to deal now |
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Oct 27 2004, 08:34 AM
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 I can't believe its not "Ryan" Group: Member Posts: 1,981 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 21,368 |
I agree!
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Oct 28 2004, 03:25 PM
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 Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
I'm getting the hint of betrayal from this poem.
I like the image you put out. Good job. |
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Oct 28 2004, 03:29 PM
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 aiko Nakamura at your service Group: Member Posts: 1,518 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 18,144 |
yes we are evil. anyways your poems always engrosses me. i like it.
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Oct 28 2004, 09:41 PM
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 The Bone Collector Group: Member Posts: 2,860 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 44,162 |
your poems suck. i hate it.
just kidding  so bloody and violent. I LOVE IT.
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Oct 28 2004, 11:16 PM
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 Want fries with that? Group: Member Posts: 692 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 50,652 |
Wow, I like it! Very detailed and creative, it sets images in your mind. Keep the good work!
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Oct 29 2004, 01:09 AM
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creepy heather Group: Official Member Posts: 4,208 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 41,580 |
wow thanks alot guys ^-^ your comments mean alot
QUOTE your poems suck. i hate it. just kidding so bloody and violent. I LOVE IT. mhmmm  i know what your subconscious is thinking noww
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