a curse, love poem again |
 Oct 24 2004, 11:52 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer*  Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134  |
a burden sank deep in my heart
the feeling so strong it tears me apart runnin through my whole body and in my vains it hurts so much theres too much pain like a curse that wont let go and it keeps holding on untill i come to you and beg for forgiveness or it'll never be gone time has gone by and i still havent said a word not even a hello, these words i want to say cant be heard i still see you everytime i dream aout that day the warmness on your smile that blew all my problems away i noe times have been hard for you and u want get away from it all if only i can sooth your hurt away with just one call but this fear holding me back afraid of what your going to say like a curse inside me that wont go away |
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Oct 25 2004, 03:34 PM
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 Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
Wow, compared to your older love poems, this one is actually pretty damn good.
You've improved and grown as a writer, man. |
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Oct 25 2004, 05:55 PM
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Eternal Syn Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 |
I think this is the only love poem that I've seen from you. And it's really good.
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Oct 25 2004, 06:36 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
damn man i noe and you know what all my writing improvement goes to joe and the other people here in cB if i hadnt join here and posts ive woulda been probably stuck to my crappy ass poems lol so big thnx to everyone here and especially joe mayn
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Sep 5 2006, 12:45 PM
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Probably the best Love poem, I've ever wrote tht's not really love lol.
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