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 Oct 21 2004, 03:46 AM
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 aiko Nakamura at your service  Group: Member Posts: 1,518 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 18,144  |
I wrote this tonight at 2 am haha. i just wrote it while i was waiting for my drunk family to come back. because i cant sleep if im alone. yea weird. anyways. it seems i dno incomplete or seomthing.
"Mannequin" I'm a mannequin Powerless; strength gone& body unrecognized I am supported by a metal stand with nothing at hand I am belittled Speechless; voice unknown& unheard I witness every motion without reaction I have no human aspects Emotionless; heart torn& no pain I don't express joy neither do i enrich in agony I'm a mannequin Powerless; no flesh& no skin I am not a human I am a mannequin |
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Oct 21 2004, 06:05 AM
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 Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
I like how you made the comparison of yourself to a Mannequin.
Qualities that you see in yourself, that apply accordingly. It only kicked in for me in the 2nd stanza QUOTE I am belittled Speechless; voice unknown& unheard I witness every motion without reaction Pretty good. 
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Oct 21 2004, 07:18 AM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 35 Joined: Oct 2004 Member No: 53,690 |
Oooh me gusta mucho!
 yeah 2nd stanza was awesome>> i witness every motion, without reaction....koolies!!!X |
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Oct 22 2004, 12:11 AM
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aiko Nakamura at your service Group: Member Posts: 1,518 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 18,144 |
hahaa. my frieend liked that part too. hhaa
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Oct 24 2004, 12:42 AM
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 LunchboxXx Group: Member Posts: 1,789 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,810 |
that's pretty clever, yo
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Oct 24 2004, 12:55 AM
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Eternal Syn Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 |
Very good.
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Oct 24 2004, 02:07 AM
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aiko Nakamura at your service Group: Member Posts: 1,518 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 18,144 |
thanks a bunch
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