Lost And Delirious, Kinda depressing... |
 Oct 13 2004, 01:25 AM
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 LaYdEe MaRyCeLL  Group: Member Posts: 9 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 28,133  |
I wrote this poem as homework for my English class. I guess its alright to be depress sometimes. I dunno...
Lost And Delirious A Poem By: SMoOnaLwAyZ 07292004 ~*~ Too tight, can't breath. Too quite, can't hear. Too dark, can't see. Sitting at the corner In the darkness With my head bent over As my tears flows down my face. Why do I feel this way? Why? Here I am. Thinking. Crying. Dying. A room full of people but I'm still alone. A child that is Lost forever. No one to turn to. No one to talk to. No one to be with you. There's no one. I thought I found someone. Thought it would last long. Thought it was with him where I belong. But it was over, It was all gone. Maybe it was a lie. Maybe it wasn't real. Maybe I was being Delirious. I guess this is really serious. But here I am sitting at The corner in the darkness. Thinking why do I feel like this. A feeling of being... Lost And Delirious. |
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Oct 13 2004, 02:59 AM
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 Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
It is alright to be depressed.
I like your style and pacing. Not bad. You should consider writing outside of class assignments. BTW, you might want to resize your sig. Too wide. |
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Oct 13 2004, 04:25 AM
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 creepy heather Group: Official Member Posts: 4,208 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 41,580 |
hah...weird rhyme scheme...when im depressed i find it hard to write, i envy you for being able to lol
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Oct 13 2004, 06:55 PM
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LaYdEe MaRyCeLL Group: Member Posts: 9 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 28,133 |
QUOTE It is alright to be depressed. I like your style and pacing. Not bad. You should consider writing outside of class assignments. BTW, you might want to resize your sig. Too wide. Thanks. I do write outside of class assignments, it became one of my hobbies now. And yeah your right, my signatrue is way too wide. I'll resize it right now. ^^ QUOTE hah...weird rhyme scheme...when im depressed i find it hard to write, i envy you for being able to lol Thank You, hearthasm. ^^ SMoOnaLwAyZ (o^_^o) |
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Oct 13 2004, 07:04 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
nice poem..i like the way how u catch the darkness and and how u feel being depressed i think thats awesome good job keep it up
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Oct 13 2004, 07:18 PM
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Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
QUOTE(Heathasm @ Oct 13 2004, 1:25 AM) hah...weird rhyme scheme...when im depressed i find it hard to write, i envy you for being able to lol Really? It's the total opposite for me. Depression = Mental orgasms = Better writing. |
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