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 Sep 24 2004, 02:54 AM
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 Will write poetry for sex!  Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600  |
This piece was a quick write. Hope you guys enjoy - Comments greatly appreciated.
 --- A lost dollar taught me the woes of life. The month that has passed me by shows me the blur of forgotten dreams locked away in dark malevolence. And here I sit, a beckoning whisper in my ear, forever muffled by nightmares untold. To sleep is to escape the nightmare, wake from mental chains that bound me to desolated fantasies, warped by the victim itself. And I stand, still lost, with no wall for me to stop myself from stumbling. |
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Sep 24 2004, 09:02 AM
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SOS Brigade!! Group: Member Posts: 2,573 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 47,775 |
wow.... very short and yet it still gets to me =P
another nice one =P keep it up |
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Sep 24 2004, 02:15 PM
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cb=bullshit. Group: Member Posts: 1,783 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 3,793 |
Everything you write is absolutely amazing...
I love it... I love it!! |
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Sep 24 2004, 02:46 PM
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Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
Thanks.
 Although being a quick write, I put more effort and thought into each seperate line, focusing on just one line at a time and not the whole piece as an entirety. Try looking at them as poetic one-liners and think them through. I hope they're good enough for people to get something out of each one. |
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Oct 5 2004, 05:35 PM
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 don't worry, be happy~ Group: Member Posts: 1,538 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 15,899 |
quickwrites are awsome.... so good job.
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Oct 5 2004, 10:16 PM
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Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
Thanks. I thought of the first line and decided to use it as a Xanga post title. But I guess I was on a roll and kept going. And I ended up having this.
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Mar 18 2005, 12:13 PM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 1,634 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 27,631 |
WOW. that honestly wowed me. ok im gona go read your other stuffs now considering everyone else is writing really boring and typical poetry.
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Mar 18 2005, 06:37 PM
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 crushed. Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 9,432 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 20,026 |
that wowed me as well..that was a quick write for you?? how amazing=)
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