another random piece, notice the alternating rhymes. ^^; |
 Sep 4 2004, 01:30 AM
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 !shobe!  Group: Member Posts: 664 Joined: Mar 2004 Member No: 5,912  |
I can't feel anything at all
No sensation whatsoever I can't take control Numb all over Everything is falling down I can't do anything about it All I can do is frown I can't ever throw a fit Sitting on my chair I have nothing left Running my fingers through my hair Wondering what to do next Laugh at me, pity me Keep in mind; this is only temporary |
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Sep 5 2004, 03:57 PM
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!shobe! Group: Member Posts: 664 Joined: Mar 2004 Member No: 5,912 |
is this poem really that bad...? =\
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Sep 5 2004, 05:09 PM
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 The voices talk too much... -.-u Group: Member Posts: 2,099 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 39,078 |
There are no alternating rhymes....
o.O |
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Sep 7 2004, 03:05 PM
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i dont see the rhymes
and plz dont double post, just be patient. |
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Sep 7 2004, 04:14 PM
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 smiling hurts Group: Member Posts: 480 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 22,630 |
poems dont have to rhyme... its all deep down =]
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