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 Aug 26 2004, 07:53 PM
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 oh sweet pestilence  Group: Member Posts: 2,251 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 22,876  |
I wrote this a couple mins. ago and it all just kinda, came out. Im kinda embarrased posting this, but oh well. Anyone like it? Or does it just suck?
 In one moment the world can change In one minute lives can alter The lightening thunders all around People's whispers in the trees As you watch through your window you can see that In one moment the world can change In one minute lives will differ As the rain comes crashing down You see me falling down People talking in the wind Raindrops falling on the ground Thunder screaming in my ears Everything changes suddenly In that moment lives are changed The thunder comes crashing down You can hear them whipering Through the darkness all around, you |
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Aug 27 2004, 09:53 PM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 5,585 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 38,082 |
AWESOME! I mostly like the part where it starts off as..
In one moment the world can change In one minute lives can alter Those lines are wow. :P |
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Aug 31 2004, 02:19 PM
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 i'm susan Group: Official Member Posts: 13,875 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 5,029 |
wow hehe and u didnt titled this? u should say "Just when the thunder comes..." ^^;;; haha anyways it's a nice poem! wow imagine me crying and thunder and rain coming haha hmm haha nice^___^
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