Your all I want, small poem |
 Aug 4 2004, 11:44 AM
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 Got Me?  Group: Member Posts: 34 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 26,430  |
I woke up one night, and thought about you
The sound of your voice, the things that you do I thought about us, and what I had lost I kept you in mind, and counted the cost You were always there, there for me When no one else could, you could always see the pain that was heald, and the fears that I knew You took it away, and put it on you As I started to cry, thinking of what I let go My telephone rang, a number I did not know On the other line, as clear as the night You quietly asked me, are you alright |
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Aug 4 2004, 11:54 AM
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Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 3,102 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 3,162 |
That's really good; nice rhyming.
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Aug 4 2004, 12:08 PM
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You know..eventhough I thought the poem was nice, you mispelling "you're" kinda ruined everything for me.
Good Job though. Keep writing. - Chinkieeyedpnoi |
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Aug 4 2004, 12:11 PM
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 ::Purrr:: Group: Member Posts: 99 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 33,825 |
awww
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Aug 4 2004, 01:28 PM
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awww....thats soooooooo niiiice!!!! *claps* i like it!
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Aug 4 2004, 01:52 PM
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Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 1,443 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 18,050 |
thats a good poem good job
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Aug 4 2004, 03:20 PM
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 Look its... Group: Official Member Posts: 5,817 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 4,767 |
i like this poem cuz i dont like it when it dont end in a haping ending. it came out good.
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Aug 4 2004, 05:58 PM
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 dizzy me up. Group: Member Posts: 3,191 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 11,139 |
wow. i love it !!!!! seriously.. i could relate
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