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Fall Away From Me, Poem
Sa-Chan
post Jul 15 2004, 05:38 PM
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Sorry, this poem really sucks, I even tried singing it as a song. I dunno, it's like I had two ideas in my head and tried to join them together. It didn't really work out all that well.


Fall Away From Me
By: Savannah


I wouldn't mind if you told me,
I was your everything, your only.
If you said that you loved me,
I swear I'd break free from this frame.
I swear that for you I could feel,
And for you...one day I could be real.

If you wanted me to be,
I'd become your fairy-tale princess,
I would steal your heart away,
I would be your April rains,
And the flowers in May.
Just tell me that I'm yours...

And for you I would be sweet,
And I would be kind, I would never sin.
For you I'd be anything, I'd be everything,
Is it true that you think I'm your world?
I'm your life, and I'm important?
Please...don't say that, I can't replace your universe.

I wish I could, I wish I could be everything for you,
I'd love to make you happy, and make you smile.
If I said I could change, I'd be lying.
So, the best thing I can do for you now,
The only thing I can think to do...
Is set you free.

I'm sorry I can't be real,
I'm sorry I can't be the pretty princess,
That you wish I could be.
I can't be your universe, and I can't be your love.
I can't break free from the frame that holds me.
In the end, I have to ask you to...

Forget me; leave me behind,
Neglect my feelings for you.
Omit my memories of you.
Overlook that kiss we shared that day,
It's all become so far away...
Fall away from me...
 
 
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EmeraldKnight
post Jul 15 2004, 06:24 PM
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It sucks? You must remember that your standards are far higher than ours..

I think its great..

For a song.. I can see parts of it working, but I would agree that the song part needs refinement..
 
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post Jul 16 2004, 05:57 PM
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that is a good poem, it really shows the main point that the author is trying to show others...

kutos to you for trying to make it into a song, i agree with EmeraldKnight, when it comes to song part, it does need some "refinement".....but hey, it doesnt hurt to try, eh? cool.gif

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