poem: " the way", tell me if you like it |
poem: " the way", tell me if you like it |
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![]() dizzy me up. ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 3,191 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 11,139 ![]() |
hmms i wrote this poem a while ago. it talks about friends/family . piece it together nd tell me what you think
![]() The way It’s the way I take things for granted, And the way the sun comes up everyday. The way you still love me, when others walked away. It’s the way you make me guilty, And the way the stars are always there. It’s the way I make you mad, But I know you’ll still be there. It’s the way I want you to change, But you won’t and you can’t; That’s the way when I realized, I can change no one but myself but I cant It’s the way you see something’s wrong, even though a smile is on my face. It’s the way you cheer me on, even when I gave up all my faith. There are the ways you plan my future, Although it’s not the future I would like. It’s the way you make me feel, like I should have a hell of a life. It’s the way you scream at me, like I’m nobody inside. These are some of the ways; That makes me want to cry. |
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![]() off the wall dork ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 470 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 19,070 ![]() |
very good... i esp love the beginning of the poem where we take things for granted
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![]() High Voltage!∞ ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Official Member Posts: 4,728 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 29,157 ![]() |
nice! it's rally soothing! and it expresses alot!
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![]() i'm susan ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Official Member Posts: 13,875 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 5,029 ![]() |
u expresses a lot in this poem but i'll give 9.9999/10^^ cause some i was like confused in the middle
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![]() Senior Member ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 2,520 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 200 ![]() |
hmm interesting, good job :)
'It’s the way I make you mad, But I know you’ll still be there.' i liek that part =] |
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![]() Kermit the frog = <3 ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 2,315 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 15,215 ![]() |
QUOTE(liquidbluac1d @ Jul 10 2004, 10:29 AM) hmm interesting, good job :) 'It’s the way I make you mad, But I know you’ll still be there.' i liek that part =] lol. same here. it's nicely written. ![]() |
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