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 Apr 19 2009, 09:33 PM
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done. thanks.
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Apr 20 2009, 12:22 AM
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rawr? Group: Official Member Posts: 2,705 Joined: Nov 2005 Member No: 285,858 |
i'm confused... some lines have good rhyming yet, it's repetitive.
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Apr 20 2009, 12:03 PM
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Good poetry shows -- it doesn't tell. Good poetry emphasizes imagery and the careful crafting of language to invoke a feeling or mood.
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