Raw., Poem I Wrote |
 Nov 5 2008, 08:58 PM
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Tell me what you think(:
Hot breath, cold air Feel the rush, take me there Wind tickling my nerves Widened eyes Dark spaces, high places The only place snow can flame Deep In My Mind Defying time, defying time Stripped naked, though I’m fully clothed Devour me Caressed by movement My desire responds I Bleed and cry Inhale this shit, swallow the surge Smoke fills my lungs, but you fill my mind This skin is not mine Powder, God i'm numb My excuse, breaking free Split, Melt, Light My sin is green and white and blue And purple and everything connected to you Kill this pain with poison Fire with fire Excitement licks my body and takes control This smoke breathes Me IM its high Destruction seduces Wants me to play Its tricky game Crawling to the edge Sinking, screaming Thief. You stole me from myself |
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Nov 10 2008, 11:12 PM
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I love this!
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Nov 10 2008, 11:17 PM
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Eternal Syn Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 |
QUOTE(boobies27 @ Nov 5 2008, 05:58 PM)  This smoke breathes Me IM its high Damn, hot ass line. You killed this poem by the way. |
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Nov 11 2008, 09:54 PM
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That is ridiculous
its like every movement that you felt and every breath u took you had something to say about it I loved it |
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Nov 12 2008, 02:36 PM
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This actually wasnt even a poem at first, i just wrote down words all over a piece of paper and typed them out and I liked the way it turned out. Thanks you guys(: I really appreciate your input. Im glad you guys like it |
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Dec 28 2008, 09:47 PM
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http://everythinginasentence.blogspot.com/
check it out. this blog is hilarious. get your own by clicking on the ad 
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Jan 19 2009, 10:27 PM
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That is a pretty amazing poem.
QUOTE(EverythingInASentence @ Dec 28 2008, 11:47 PM) http://everythinginasentence.blogspot.com/ check it out. this blog is hilarious. get your own by clicking on the ad Stay on subject punk. |
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