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 May 14 2008, 02:53 PM
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Tears stream down her face,
She’s wide awake. She deals with the sarcasm, She gets put down, She wants to love him but he gives her no support. He’s overbearing, yes he is. She tries to love him, She really does. He gets her frustrated. She forgives him without an apology, But she will never forget. The scars will remain, oh yes the scars will remain. |
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May 14 2008, 02:56 PM
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 The Resident Drunk Group: Head Staff Posts: 8,623 Joined: Nov 2007 Member No: 593,266 |
I like it.
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May 14 2008, 05:39 PM
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 Tick tock, Bill Group: Administrator Posts: 8,764 Joined: Dec 2005 Member No: 333,948 |
It's simple and straight to the point. Overall I like it.
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May 17 2008, 02:46 AM
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 kthxbai Group: Official Designer Posts: 2,832 Joined: Feb 2008 Member No: 621,203 |
sounds like it could be a song.
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May 18 2008, 04:04 PM
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Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 45 Joined: Feb 2008 Member No: 622,075 |
thanks for the support guys =)
earlier this week writing poems was the only way i could cope with everything. but i'm doing better now. |
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