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 Apr 22 2008, 09:05 PM
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 kthxbai  Group: Official Designer Posts: 2,832 Joined: Feb 2008 Member No: 621,203  |
 Bombs bursting children crying the sound of guns firing at a loved one putting an end to a precious life Tears falling blood stained streets children's parents taken; kidnapped by the icy hands of death. I sometimes ponder, why do we destroy, or meddle in the affairs of strangers from other worlds? Why do some find it just to relieve their brothers of the most precious gift of all? Stop the madness get out now before our world comes to a painful end. // edit: this is an assignment for my reading class. I've written 5 poems so far; this was my 5th try. I can post the other four, but only if you want. I doubt they're worth posting. |
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Apr 22 2008, 09:06 PM
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 ٩(͡๏̯͡๏)۶ Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 14,309 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 65,593 |
MOVED TO WRITING
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Apr 22 2008, 09:06 PM
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 Tick tock, Bill Group: Administrator Posts: 8,764 Joined: Dec 2005 Member No: 333,948 |
QUOTE(Tungster @ Apr 22 2008, 09:06 PM)  MOVED TO WRITING This isn't bad at all, by the way. I have a quick question though, did you mean "or meedle in the affairs" or "or meddle in the affairs"? |
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Apr 22 2008, 09:10 PM
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 /人◕‿‿◕人\ Group: Official Member Posts: 8,283 Joined: Dec 2007 Member No: 602,927 |
I got confused
QUOTE Sorry, some required files are missing, if you intended to view a topic, it's possible that it's been moved or deleted. Please go back and try again. We're from Mississippi, theres not supposed to be talent here. |
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Apr 22 2008, 09:14 PM
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kthxbai Group: Official Designer Posts: 2,832 Joined: Feb 2008 Member No: 621,203 |
QUOTE(superstitious @ Apr 22 2008, 09:06 PM) This isn't bad at all, by the way. I have a quick question though, did you mean "or meedle in the affairs" or "or meddle in the affairs"? i've never heard "meedle" before, so I guess I mean meddle? Interfere with, whichever word means that. |
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Apr 22 2008, 09:15 PM
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Tick tock, Bill Group: Administrator Posts: 8,764 Joined: Dec 2005 Member No: 333,948 |
QUOTE(emberfly @ Apr 22 2008, 09:14 PM) i've never heard "meedle" before, so I guess I mean meddle? Interfere with, whichever word means that. Yep, meddle is the one you want to use then. =) |
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Apr 29 2008, 09:23 PM
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kthxbai Group: Official Designer Posts: 2,832 Joined: Feb 2008 Member No: 621,203 |
oh no! I just realized I made that typo. Sorry! I changed it. sorry for the confusion.
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Apr 29 2008, 09:27 PM
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 Fellatio. Group: Official Member Posts: 2,122 Joined: Mar 2007 Member No: 511,775 |
Pretty Good I think.
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