the rain, =-o |
 Jun 21 2004, 08:54 PM
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 Rock like a GIRL..  Group: Member Posts: 250 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 13,434  |
i wrote this one in 6th grade......
 i am not happy with myselfe.the rain it keeps me up at night a fever busting through thrown among a crashing storm bleeding icey drops of tears frozed in the dense cold atoss a freakish smile ghastly pounding in my head a glance above a hideous breaze to the ground the rain it keeps me up at night |
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Jun 21 2004, 10:13 PM
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 samurai champloo! Group: Member Posts: 748 Joined: Dec 2003 Member No: 2 |
"a fever busting through
thrown among a crashing storm" 
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Jun 22 2004, 08:17 AM
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I love the part 'bleeding icey drops of tears'. I don't know what to say about it, just wow.
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