a poem a poem, oh, but what thy name? |
 Jun 21 2004, 08:49 PM
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 Rock like a GIRL..  Group: Member Posts: 250 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 13,434  |
**name that gives poem away goes here***
every now and then i resort to the old pictures piled away atop dusty shelves. i know your face is out of reach with every step closer i take i can see straight through you my mind still wonders at your name you never knew i felt this way you know i cant take a broken heart you knew i couldnt have been in love with you.. you never gave me my chance you saw straight through my heart that other girl that other love your only hope my only hate the thought of your pain the thought of losing what was never mine i cant stand your happiness your tears kill me your voice.. your voice i am not in love i am not in love i am not in love you cant care for me i cant love you why does my heart deny me why cant i speak the truth i love you so please dont walk away i care for you your raggety old photos ill put them away my shy smile disguised you never knew i cared i cared  please dont laugh 
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Jun 22 2004, 08:18 AM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 3,077 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 3,904 |
 I would anyone laugh? That was heart breaking. So like me... 
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Jun 23 2004, 10:45 PM
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 short one Group: Member Posts: 469 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 23,284 |
very good c u posted on my poem not so much rhyming but really i think i counted only like 4 rhymes ur poem is alot better than mine tho so mayb i should take ur advice
http://www.xanga.com/home.aspx?user=jz1134 my xanga^^ |
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Jun 23 2004, 10:49 PM
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 why did i put this here? Group: Member Posts: 118 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 21,609 |
its a good poem except it doesnt have much rhythm
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Jun 24 2004, 07:22 PM
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short one Group: Member Posts: 469 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 23,284 |
good job again
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Jun 24 2004, 07:25 PM
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im' edible Group: Member Posts: 1,529 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 23,022 |
nice repetition.
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Jun 24 2004, 08:43 PM
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 i`m in love & always will be Group: Member Posts: 1,138 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 12,769 |
great job.. i really relate to the poem <3
keep up the good work |
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Jun 29 2004, 05:09 PM
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 s a r a h r o s e <3 Group: Member Posts: 575 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 12,944 |
aw
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Jun 29 2004, 06:30 PM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 1,831 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 20,324 |
Awesome. I can relate to it a lot.
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