Poems...by er..me, don't laugh because god didnt love me |
 Jun 21 2004, 06:19 PM
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 I know who you did last night  Group: Member Posts: 27 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 23,988  |
Bleeding From the inside
Inside I'm bleeding Inside im dying I'm shutting down and im sick of trying these bloody tears full of all my fears disappear You locked me in a tiny box and stabbed me with the key Why do you confuse my smile with happiness? I'm drowning in darkness Just let me bleed from the inside i spill and this pain is starting to kill these wounds arent healing im loosing all feeling lost in the darkness bleeding from the inside -Fin- dont laugh at me..most of my poems are songs i wrote only without the music |
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Jun 21 2004, 08:35 PM
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 Rock like a GIRL.. Group: Member Posts: 250 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 13,434 |
thats really good... but try not to focus so hard on rhyming. you can express truer feelings without that hassle...
  but still. very, very good. 
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Jun 22 2004, 08:15 AM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 3,077 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 3,904 |
Ah I can relate. I think it's quite good.
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Jun 25 2004, 02:03 AM
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 × JeNi × Group: Member Posts: 32 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 23,307 |
das reallie good.. =] itz very deep
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Jun 26 2004, 08:20 PM
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 ohh gosh no Group: Member Posts: 86 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,892 |
thats really good, i really liked it!
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Jun 27 2004, 03:43 PM
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 Look its... Group: Official Member Posts: 5,817 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 4,767 |
imnot gonna laugh i like it those are good. i feel likethat. i cant relate to it and thats how i liek it more then the others here in cB
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