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[WillTeddy]

Thoughts


When I was little, I use to think to myself what I wanted to do when I grow up

Now that time is slowly creeping up to me

I cannot escape it

I cannot deny it

I remember the days back in my memories where I would stare at the trees

The leaves still as my body leaning on the balcony

The green colour and the gentle breeze in the air would ease my pain of searching for purpose

I promised to myself I would make something of this life

Find love

Find passion

Find a purpose in life where I can live in peace

Protect the person that I love

Protect everything with my own hands

As a man, I'm willing to carry all the burden of this world onto my shoulders

Carry all the burden of my loved ones

To find that sense of dignity a true man should have

The protector

The provider

The one who's there to give

I want to go to a river bank and just lay there for a while

Stare up into the night sky and wonder

I try to keep optimistic

To be honest this world is just too frightening

A person is so powerless at the times where he/she needs to be strong

My heart and soul drifts into my alter reality

Searching for that tranquility and peace

I need strength

I want to be able to look into my hands and see power

Not a pair of pale hands slowly withering away into age

And die as the time passes

Ahh~ the sound of the rain is filled in my head

I don't even know what's reality anymore

I just feeling like pouring my heart out for someone

For the person I truely love

How I wish I was more of a man for her

Many times I really wanna apologise to her heart

Apologise for being spineless when she needs a man to stand tall and steady

I want to take her away from this reality for a moment

And into mine

So that we can drift together aimlessly not caring what our destination was

But enjoying the journey together

Where she would not be alone

To be that kind person beside her where she seeks comfort

I don't want to hurt her anymore

I don't want her to hurt anymore

I want to understand the mysteries of this world

I want to be able to help people instead of reading their problems

Powerless to act

I know that what I write at this moment will only exist in this very frame of time

Tomorrow will be a new day

And I will forget this feeling of regret that's trapped under my skin

I will live on and be the person that I'm known as to everyone that's around me

Waiting for this inner self to resurface again

Til that time comes my way once more

I will sleep and rest my mind

And let myself drift in infinity

And find the peace I wanted

Even if it's for one night

I want to live~

[AddenLee]

I love it. Written wonderfully and even though I'm not as good with English as most, i can get feeling out of the writing. One sujestion, the part with "he/she" broke the trace of the writing. maybe come up with something else. just he or something. but not the he/she, it broke the rading to much

[WillTeddy]

yea i'm an amateur writer lol

i only do this during that spur of the moment where you just have to pour something onto paper or in this case E-paper XD

i got positive feedback from my girlfriend and i just thought i'd post it here to see what other people think of it :)

any criticism is better than no criticism :)

thanks for the tip, ill take it in mind :)

[cherry90]

WOW i fought some of the poems i liked 2write were thought provokin!!! cricky that has a massive impact and i loved it!! do u have any mor writings?

[WillTeddy]

they will keep coming if people like to take the time and read it XD

I like to revolve around the idea of life and the things we come across

i've seen and met alot of people from the time i was born

and there's so many questions left unanswered

only way to express that curiosity that's driving me nuts from time to time is by writing

so yea, i got one posted soon :)

[cherry90]

i know what you mean!! please could u check out my poems???

its kinda like u get a rush of emotion and u cnt handl;e it!! its alot easyer 2 rite it dwn than do anything else! and also writing is a cause 2 get things out of your mind and helps the processe of breakin them down and helpin u understand things

[WillTeddy]

yep sure i can check them out :)

Its an honor~

It calms the spirit and eases that emptiness inside

Helps you sleep well too :)

[cherry90]

its also a gd form of stress relief!!!!

[AddenLee]

u keep posting ill keep reading. i like ur style

[dispn0ygonekrazy]

damn I came in here thinking it'd be one of those boring amateur writing. But damnnnn I was wrong good shit dude, I like how I can read it and also imagine myself in your position through your words. keep it up I'll expect to read more from you.

[Ekay]

I finally found the time to read this. Honestly, I don't know how much this means to you, but I just need to say that, I have found myself wanting to do a lot of the things you write in here, like going somewhere (maybe not a river bank but yeah) to look at the stars. Where I live, I can't necessarily go onto my roof. And some other things, but I don't feel like boring you. Honestly, thank you for posting this, I needed this at this time.

[WillTeddy]

im glad you guys like my writing, but im leaning towards that fact i get really repetitive with all my writings, so yea hopefully it doesnt have that effect :S