Beginning, A sonnet |
 Feb 19 2007, 04:46 PM
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 I've got ADD and magic markers. Oh the thrills I will have.  Group: Member Posts: 624 Joined: Jul 2006 Member No: 445,743  |
I've only written two sonnets, this being the second. Tell me what you think.
Beginning is the hardest part I don’t know what to say. It’s hard to frame my words in art It’s not in me today. The sun shines golden through the glass It warms and browns my skin. Unfortunately, I must pass I have yet to begin. The sun’s bright glare has blinded me It's clouded my mind’s eye. I haven’t even started, yet The end is drawing nigh. I shan't give up, I shall not quit. I’ll reach the end, if bit by bit. |
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Feb 19 2007, 06:54 PM
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Hmm, I think its nice for a second one you've ever written.
I on the other hand don't really like it  I just don't like how its worded, although I like how it makes me think. I think you still need some more work, but I think its great for now.
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Feb 19 2007, 10:42 PM
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I like this. I see how all your words are put together in a good fashion. Nice job for your second one. Keep working to get better.
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