Musically Poetic |
 Feb 14 2007, 11:30 PM
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this is one of my favorite poems that Ive written..I usually dont like the poems that I write lol..
A bow to strings on my violin is like pen to my paper... When I stroke so beautifully, Words come from the pleasant sounds of my instrument... I create love, hate, anger by one note..as if I wrote a thousand poems... I see and hear the world around me and I wonder how I could bless them with with a song... A song of poems... My violin is my shelter from the cold streets on which I live... My human hands have formed into the soft, musically inclined hands of which I play so softly for my soul to go to sleep... I forever remain a young, aspiring violinst.. I forever remain one of the most talented young poets alive... I forever remain...Musically Poetic.... |
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| *Kathleen* |
Feb 15 2007, 12:27 PM
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QUOTE(Miss Mafia @ Feb 14 2007, 11:30 PM)  I see and hear the world around me and I wonder how I could bless with with a song... Typo?  It's good -- the concept reminded me of the one essay I wrote for USC. Mrrm. *Decides to post it* Well, not the music idea -- the idea of the power of language.
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Feb 15 2007, 09:00 PM
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QUOTE(Kathleen @ Feb 15 2007, 11:27 AM) Typo? It's good -- the concept reminded me of the one essay I wrote for USC. Mrrm. *Decides to post it* Well, not the music idea -- the idea of the power of language.lol I just caught ut..I edited it though. Thanks 
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Feb 19 2007, 11:53 PM
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I'm Cattt. :] Group: Validating Posts: 1,722 Joined: Apr 2005 Member No: 130,831 |
^It has not been edited.
I can relate to this very well, since I am a violinist myself. The ending is the best part though I wish there were more to the poem. It's too short! |
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Feb 20 2007, 12:01 AM
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 Oh My Goblet of Fire! Group: Member Posts: 222 Joined: Feb 2007 Member No: 504,421 |
This is a really beautiful poem! I love your message and syntax. However, it would be nice if you constructed it without the ellipses (...). I think that would give the poem much more impact.
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