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poetwritremokid
post Feb 14 2007, 08:57 PM
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You don't know how much this hurts;
Now because of you;
My heart is fading;
With the scars you left in my heart;
I don't think my life can start;
Only camp can make me happy;
Or when I spend time with my family;
I guess you aren't one of those things;
Because you just now made me sad;
My heart doesn't know who you are;
And I guess it will never will;
Your the reason I love;
Your the reason I breath;
Your the reason I'll die;
I am sorry that I can't show my love;
But I'll wait if I have to;
We are different in ways;
But that is why I love you;
You complete me and thats all that matters;
I can't live without you;
I love you;
I'm sorry.
 
 
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oXMuhNirvanaXo
post Feb 19 2007, 10:54 PM
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I'm sorry this also sounds really emo. I don't like this one all that much eather. It sounds like some one is going to die.. Keep working on it.

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iloveyou1223
post Feb 27 2007, 08:18 PM
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again..semi colons...whats so special about them? and yes, who is dying?
 
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post Feb 27 2007, 09:40 PM
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this guy who i used to love...met him in internet...he died b/c he couldn't have me...
 
bat19
post Feb 28 2007, 03:11 AM
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you did it again....I don't like this one. I'd also like to point out that unless you're lying about your age, you're only about 14. You know nothing about real relationships, and don't give me any of that "But you don't know what I've been through" shit, okay. You're still a kid and you don't know anything yet. Everybody goes through this at your age. If you think you might be different. like I said before look at the hundred other posts identical to this. Identical because it's all the same story, more or less.
 
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post Feb 28 2007, 03:22 AM
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Kinda emo. corny. eh.. amatuer. keep trying.
 
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post Feb 28 2007, 04:19 PM
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i was joking when i asked who was dying....

trying writing a happy poem, or something meaningful instead of "i hate life" maybe instead of that write about how you opened your eyes
 

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