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| *My Cinderella.* |
 Jan 30 2007, 12:28 AM
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This Confession
You cried, I shed I lied and you bled And I know right now That you don’t really want to hear This confession I’m so sorry, my dear I don’t want you to fear That our friendship would die So please, love, don’t cry I was the idiot to think That our love was yet to sink Again I doth cried Showed my sensitive side You cried, I shed I lied and you bled And I know right now That you don’t really want to hear This confession You put the muay in my thai The good in my bye You were the sun in my rain The soothing of pain Don’t you ever think That it’ll be gone in a blink I’m here to stay With each passing day This confession Is my obsession For you and I to stay Forever until our dying day |
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Jan 30 2007, 12:33 AM
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 Home is where your rump rests!  Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 4,235 Joined: Aug 2006 Member No: 451,969 |
Jane, it's lovely! I like the repitition of the first verse.
 The title reminds me of Holly, btw. :] |
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Jan 30 2007, 01:49 AM
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Eternal Syn Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 |
nice and descriptive :] didn't know you like to write
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Jan 30 2007, 08:46 AM
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Good Job Jane, I didn't even know you like to write poetry
QUOTE You were the sun in my rain I liked that line alot. It's good to see more new people posting in here in the writing forum.
The soothing of pain |
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| *My Cinderella.* |
Jan 30 2007, 01:33 PM
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Haha, I usually write when I rise from writer's block or whenever I'm feeling down.
Thanks for the feedback, everyone! |
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Jan 30 2007, 01:35 PM
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 D.L.A Group: Member Posts: 82 Joined: Jan 2007 Member No: 499,537 |
Jane this is great
 Well done.! Have u ever taken part in a writing competition? I think it'd be a good idea. 
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