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Reality, Uronacid: Poem
*Uronacid*
post Aug 23 2006, 04:34 PM
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Reality

The barriers we put up
When we fail to see the test
That life has put before us
To keep us from being honest

Always Sitting, Waiting
You'll let life pass you by
Aways procrastinating
Who sits and waits to die

Grab hold of your short world
Your vapors end is near
Make the best with what you have
Becuase there is no time for fear

Don't let it effect you
You're beautiful to me
You dwell upon your past
Drowning in your own sea

Heavy hearts in shopping carts
You're looking for a reason
To change the future that you have
Because you feel so worthless


If you want to know what this means... ask me... It's written from a 3rd person perspective.
 
 
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lovescream
post Aug 24 2006, 12:25 PM
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define our lives for us.
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oh i like it. i especially love some of the way you put words into rhymes, like the first verse. I especially loved the fourth one. well-written.
 
RiddleMeWonders
post Aug 25 2006, 08:04 AM
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fell in love with a boy
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QUOTE
Always Sitting, Waiting
You'll let life pass you by
Aways procrastinating
Who sits and waits to die


my favorite part.

i'll be interested to see some of the other stuff you write
 
*My Cinderella.*
post Aug 25 2006, 10:32 AM
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Ohh. I like it. Kinda sends out a message to not take life got granted.
 
*Uronacid*
post Aug 31 2006, 10:14 AM
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Thanks so much guys :]
 

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