Beautifully Broken |
 Jul 28 2006, 06:01 PM
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 Koorime  Group: Member Posts: 153 Joined: Sep 2005 Member No: 237,135  |
I stare at the bloody broken mirror
Gazing at my reflection As my tears slide down my skin. There's nothing here for me now I'm living a total lie The truth of it is I'm beautifully broken. The whole time that I was around everyone else I put up a mask. I never let anyone get close to me. I don't regret that. Now as my mask is finally cracking, I wonder to myself, Am I actually myself? Or have I changed too much? No, the real answer is that I'm broken beyond repair. |
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Mar 16 2007, 07:11 AM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 280 Joined: Jul 2006 Member No: 436,368 |
again. really well done.
could use alittle more moody ness to it. rather than that. wow. |
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Mar 17 2007, 11:10 PM
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 What a sick, masochistic lion. Group: Member Posts: 1,853 Joined: Sep 2006 Member No: 460,535 |
i like the obvious theme and language of it.
but "beautifully broken" kind of seems ... cliche? like something you'd hear in a song, you know? |
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| *My Cinderella.* |
Mar 19 2007, 04:59 PM
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That is deep.
 Mask cracking...bravo.
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