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dont say a word, another poem
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post Apr 13 2006, 11:25 PM
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The poison within
Begins to seep out
As lips touch lips
And hands caress hands.
The tears have been welcomed
As they dance down my cheeks,
Its the usual; its the usual.
The boy wants skin;
Skin to touch
The girl says no to this deciteful sin,
Its too much darling; its too much.
And yet, shes never enough.
Her heart shatters like a vase knocked onto the floor,
Too many pieces to be repaired.
Her lustful lips, her shaking hips,
Its just too hard for him to bear.
Oh what a mistake,
How did this break?
The world keeps spinning,
The mind keeps racing,
And who is it again that youre embracing ?
Youre the one I never lost
And youre the one paying the cost.
My hand is empty,
Theres no hand for it to fill.
I guess they were right when they said
Looks could kill.
The heart so black, so bruised and blue
Can only think of you, you, you.
The boy with eyes so soft and kind,
Constantly runs throughout her mind.
Every night hes in her head,
Every night he wants her in bed.
Dont say a word,
Loves never heard.
Just stay silent as long as you can,
And maybe, just maybe,
he'll be your man.
Continue to lie, don't admit youre wrong
Then we can keep this thing going strong.
Shes so oblivious,
But she thinks she knows.
Stay innocent and unaware
Until the midnight you receive your scare,
And the whole world comes crashing down.
Just emerge with a smile,
And never frown.
Then maybe he'll never know your honest truth,
and you can never use a broken heart as your excuse.
 
 
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illumineering
post Apr 14 2006, 01:25 AM
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QUOTE(tahco_monster @ Apr 13 2006, 11:25 PM) *
The poison within
Begins to seep out
As lips touch lips
And hands caress hands.


This is a fantastic introduction! Great job! It encourages visions of Medusa eating the "forbidden fruit" in an opium den....
 
Paradox of Life
post Apr 14 2006, 09:25 AM
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My name's Katt. Nice to meet you!
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The world keeps spinning,
The mind keeps racing,
And who is it again that youre embracing ?


I loved those lines. This poem was so good. It was consistent with the theme throughout and your word choice and rhyming was flawless. The only critique I have is that you should seperate it into stanzas. Beautiful poem!
 
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post Apr 15 2006, 12:36 PM
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illumineering&Paradox of Life
thanks _smile.gif

and uh Paradox of Life i'll try doing that next time :]
thanks much
 

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