flip it out and curl it down, tired & so out comes the natural high |
 Mar 23 2006, 12:15 AM
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 fell in love with a boy  Group: Member Posts: 523 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,965  |
my words are falling true
but they are not entertaining you and my eyes are not open so my lies are always broken when i contradict myself and i despise cotton candied whispers because they mean nothing in this place you told the meter to survive but you forgot to lace the taste and it's bittersour not bittersweet so pull the hands from pockets and greet the day with a firm handshake shake the dust from your behind you're collecting tools with foolish rhymes my hands are tied but thats okay i'm about to go to bed anyway. |
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Mar 23 2006, 11:06 PM
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victim of myspace.com Group: Member Posts: 395 Joined: Mar 2006 Member No: 386,435 |
Ahg, that didn't really have a clear meaning...
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Mar 23 2006, 11:36 PM
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fell in love with a boy Group: Member Posts: 523 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,965 |
it's about myspace or anything internet in a sense.
you don't really know anyone you say stuff that you think is real, that you really think you believe in because that's what everyone else says they believe, but you speak differently elsewhere. you're saying stuff just because you think it's ideal to say them. QUOTE you're collecting tools with foolish rhymes this refers to the poem itself. QUOTE and i despise cotton candied whispers refers to those messages you get from people. "oh your so hot." "If you were here, i'd date you." "you're amazing." "lyke omg i luv u 4eva." because they DON'T really know you.because they mean nothing in this place you told the meter to survive but you forgot to lace the taste and it's bittersour not bittersweet and you want to show people who you really are, but you try too hard and it comes off arrogant or rude or just plain stupid. And then QUOTE so pull the hands from pockets and greet the day with a firm handshake shake the dust from your behind you're collecting tools with foolish rhymes my hands are tied but thats okay i'm about to go to bed anyway. just get over it and move on. go to bed, don't worry about it. none of it matters really right now. |
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Mar 23 2006, 11:41 PM
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victim of myspace.com Group: Member Posts: 395 Joined: Mar 2006 Member No: 386,435 |
^Thanks. That really cleared things out for me. =D
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Mar 25 2006, 01:24 AM
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 Yawn Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 9,530 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 65,772 |
Wow, I really like this one.
Especially the message behind it. It really gets to me. That ending is great too, I looked at the last line as when you say on the computer, "alright g2g to bed" or something. Like it could keep continue the next day, goodbye for now, and what everyone says at the end of these convos. Great work as usual! I liked it before and after I read your meaning behind it, beautiful choice of words |
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Mar 25 2006, 10:54 PM
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 I love Havasupai Group: Member Posts: 1,040 Joined: Jul 2005 Member No: 163,878 |
GAH!
What a telling reminder of all the time and energy I waste online! |
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Mar 26 2006, 01:16 PM
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Beautiful way of describing the internet/myspace/etc. Honestly, I wouldn't have guessed it's meaning if you didn't explain but after you did the whole thing made perfect sense.
It makes you think too. Oh how I wish we didn't depend on the internet so much these days. |
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Mar 26 2006, 10:07 PM
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 no news is good news... Group: Member Posts: 123 Joined: Sep 2005 Member No: 232,063 |
I liked it.
I liked the meaning behind it. |
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