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QUICK!!!, I need to know what poem to say!
IceCream4U
post Mar 21 2006, 10:46 PM
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Okay, so I wrote two poems, both the same thing but with different words, and I need help picking which one!! HELP!

Option One
One window is all I need
To look out at the world
To see the road I have not yet taken.
For my future experiences to be seen
To reflect with the way I see myself,
And forget what others think of me.


Option Two
One window is all I need
To look out at the world
To see the road I have not yet taken.

One window is all I need
To be the sun.
Enlightening those to dark to see
The exciting colors of life.

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I think option 1 flows better, but I think the second stanza of the second option is a little better than the first overall poem. I DON'T KNOW HELP!!!!!
 
 
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*Phoenixx*
post Mar 21 2006, 10:52 PM
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Ah! They're both really enlightening and inspiring. So short and simple yet so good; for lack of a better adjective at the moment.

I agree with you on both the poems but I think the first one is better.

It also depends what message you want to send..helping others in life(2)..or experiencing life yourself(1).

It's up to you! I love both.
But if I had to choose (because I'd like to be somewhat helpful) I'd say one!
 
Tribal J_Rome
post Mar 22 2006, 01:41 PM
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^i agree with the phoenix person. they're both real good, but if i had to choose i'd say one. i guess cuz of the flow, i really like it that way. and i didn't notice about the different messages in each one until they pointed it out
 

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