..... i dont know what to call it, 1st poem |
 Mar 15 2006, 10:13 AM
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 Emo Fruitcake  Group: Member Posts: 76 Joined: Mar 2006 Member No: 382,761  |
I wondered when the tables would turn
You threw fire around Never knowing i wouldn't burn Now i have let it go So why can't you This is becoming more worthless Find something new to do I could never believe the words you said If lies were guns You would already be dead its not finished, but its getting there |
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Mar 15 2006, 07:30 PM
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 "lal! laugh a little!" Group: Member Posts: 192 Joined: Jan 2006 Member No: 364,863 |
*waits 4 ending**
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Mar 15 2006, 08:05 PM
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crumpled up old piece of paper scribble on me Group: Member Posts: 49 Joined: Mar 2006 Member No: 386,366 |
thats really good! i like it alot cant wait till its finished
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Mar 21 2006, 06:56 PM
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Emo Fruitcake Group: Member Posts: 76 Joined: Mar 2006 Member No: 382,761 |
I wondered when the tables would turn You threw fire around Never knowing i wouldn't burn Now i have let it go So why can't you This is becoming more worthless Find something new to do Im finding this so hard to beleive I thought we were friends Now you've left me to bleed I've tryed so hard To fix all of this You didn't even listen What did i miss, Did you change your mind? Do you not think of me as a friend? Am i a waste of your time? Now i just sit here and think that I could never believe the words you said If lies were guns You would already be dead its finished!
 Not my best. First one that I'm sharing with people  |
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Mar 21 2006, 07:03 PM
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 wut wut in the butt? Group: Human Posts: 2,108 Joined: Sep 2005 Member No: 227,723 |
this would turn out to be a nice acoustic song. i love the first 3 lines and the last 2. i think cuz they stick out the most.
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| *ranniel* |
Mar 21 2006, 10:36 PM
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Me too^.
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Mar 21 2006, 10:48 PM
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victim of myspace.com Group: Member Posts: 395 Joined: Mar 2006 Member No: 386,435 |
^Me three^
I love the ending!!!! Better than mine! GOOD JOB!! WHOOOO-HOO!!! EDIT!! I just noticed in your (^) signature. QUOTE I can make skins very good, It's supposed to be: I can make skins very well, Well is for verbs, good is for nouns. Well is describing how you make; therefor its an adverb. Good is an adjective. Well is an adverb. Sorry, I can be a grammar brat about the stuff I know =P |
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