[untitled]november 24,2004, I found this today |
 Feb 25 2006, 06:25 PM
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i was going through my computer when i found this.
A moonlit room
Full of his own little memories Darkness seemed to revere his soul Only A distant whisper Echoed in his heartless persona A distant whisper… That’s all it will ever be A faded memory for the unforeseen To see That’s all she is now Someone from the past All because he left her For someone he knew would never last everyone did... A dying echo… Of what could and should have been Her eternal lover His false love is a burden of your sin You mistook her love for yours And thought you could love him as well But to love someone who never loved you ...That was my ticket to hell. He broke you when he said yes And you never noticed it until the end Was he selfish to try and hold you Even when his heart began to bend? He acted his way in your heart to be everything you wanted him to be and everything you didn't. Herizon, the monster. |
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Feb 25 2006, 06:26 PM
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  that was beautiful <3
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Feb 26 2006, 12:03 AM
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 "lal! laugh a little!" Group: Member Posts: 192 Joined: Jan 2006 Member No: 364,863 |
Did you write this...?? It was lovely!
--->Sierra |
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Mar 1 2006, 08:07 PM
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Sounds so exquisite!
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Mar 3 2006, 09:26 PM
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Senior Member Group: Official Member Posts: 890 Joined: Nov 2005 Member No: 285,645 |
i like two lines out of this whole poem
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Mar 3 2006, 10:32 PM
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 fell in love with a boy Group: Member Posts: 523 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,965 |
QUOTE(herizon xP @ Mar 3 2006, 10:26 PM)  i like two lines out of this whole poem but you wrote it? I liked it.. some bits seemed contradictory, but it was good. |
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Mar 3 2006, 10:36 PM
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Senior Member Group: Official Member Posts: 890 Joined: Nov 2005 Member No: 285,645 |
QUOTE(RiddleMeWonders @ Mar 3 2006, 9:32 PM) but you wrote it? I liked it.. some bits seemed contradictory, but it was good. It was supposed to contradict. I did write it. I only liked two lines, though. |
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Mar 8 2006, 02:34 AM
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Eternal Syn Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 |
I don't want to pry or anything...but what are the two lines that you like?
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Mar 8 2006, 03:17 AM
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Senior Member Group: Official Member Posts: 890 Joined: Nov 2005 Member No: 285,645 |
which two did you like, sir?
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Mar 8 2006, 10:39 PM
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 Pocketful of Sunshine Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 8,690 Joined: Nov 2005 Member No: 289,004 |
Beautiful, Hez. I never knew you were such a good writer.
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Mar 9 2006, 01:57 AM
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Senior Member Group: Official Member Posts: 890 Joined: Nov 2005 Member No: 285,645 |
pff, hahaa, me?
that's not very good criticism. |
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May 1 2006, 08:07 PM
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 wut wut in the butt? Group: Human Posts: 2,108 Joined: Sep 2005 Member No: 227,723 |
Hez Ping, I admire your writing skills! Skillaaaaaaa
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