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A Broken Heart
Dark's Angel
post Jan 13 2006, 07:10 PM
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I wrote this one Tuesday. I just started and couldn't stop until i was finished.

A Broken Heart

The tears stream down my face
As I look at your retreating form
You say It can never work out
That we can never be together
Why did you lead me on?
Why did you make me think you
had feelings for me?
I've come to accept your love of my twin and my one true best friend
But your betrayal is something
I cannot forgive.
My feelings for you are slowly turning to
Hatred.
 
 
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*Zatanna*
post Jan 13 2006, 07:28 PM
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:( Lovely poem though. I like how you capitalized "It". I so can relate to this.
 
KissMe2408
post Jan 14 2006, 02:51 AM
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Wow...I could relate to this back in my 8th grade year. *flashbacks*

I think you did a great job, and yah sometimes the writing just flows, i know what you mean. You write, and can't stop until it's finished.

Two thumbs up :)
Don't stop writing
 
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post Jan 14 2006, 08:14 AM
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i can totally relate
i like it
its pretty damn good
 
azn_at_heart
post Jan 14 2006, 09:24 PM
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some reason i feel alone...guess cus my true self is never shown
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its good and i can relate......i think mainly everyone can relate so it might be shown a diffrent message to others
 
Dark's Angel
post Jan 15 2006, 06:23 PM
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I'm glad that you like it. Sometimes when I think of what happened to me or a close friend in the in past, a poem pops up and I can't help but write it down on paper.
 

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