Dressed To Kill |
 Dec 14 2005, 03:10 PM
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 My desperate heart is far too weak to run for you this long.  Group: Member Posts: 640 Joined: Jun 2005 Member No: 150,342  |
new poem. i wrote it about... two days ago? yeah. It doesnt rlly have a title...
She appeared to be dressed to kill a heart on the ground cold and so still The depression in the numbing air the scene in freeze frame drenched in despair It's like magic the way the blade sliced right through your life right through your skin right through our love let the catastrophe begin Say you prayers this means goodnight there's just no coming back from a heart breaking death ------------- ...lol i always love them until i let other people see them. |
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Dec 14 2005, 06:37 PM
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 Yawn Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 9,530 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 65,772 |
Whoa, nice work!
QUOTE right through your life right through your skin right through our love I think this part affected me the most. You write so beautifully, and so real. Please keep submitting! |
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Dec 14 2005, 07:29 PM
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 i'm such a sucker sometimes. Group: Member Posts: 441 Joined: Jun 2005 Member No: 151,732 |
I must say, if I may put it so bluntly, this rocks. I love your style of writing. Keep it up!
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Dec 17 2005, 12:35 PM
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nice man nice
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