A little thing called Love by Jane, Kylie's story of a broken soul |
A little thing called Love by Jane, Kylie's story of a broken soul |
| *iNyCxShoRT* |
Nov 18 2005, 08:00 PM
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Caution: Don't start what you can't finish.
"Happy Birthday, Dork!" I smiled, rubbing chocolate icing on Brandon's nose. For a long time now, we had been the best of friends. And when I say best of friends, I mean it. We accompanied each other everywhere we went. We cracked up at the stupidest things, I would always listen to his problems, he had many. Yet, I said nothing and just listened to his voice. We were rebels together. Now, we weren't always like this. Before we were complete strangers, until 7th grade...which is where the story all begins, I sat across from him in science class, and always found him adorable. He was in the cool crowd, I wasn't. I didn't have many friends, just a few close ones. Ones that I could trust. We were having our first week of school. It hit me that Brandon was a really sweet guy. "You. Yeah, you. Letme getta pencil?" Okay. Maybe he wasn't the best first impression. But I was completely shocked that he asked me for anything at all. I quickly reached into my bag and gave him what he needed. "Thanks." He smiled. Science class passed very quickly and before I knew it, it was lunch time. I sat by myself, suddenly Brandon came. Took a seat next to me. and spun around to face me. "Well, I've never seen you around this school before, you new?" he asked. I looked down, No I wasn't new, I've been in this school since last year, I wouldn't think that a popular guy like him would notice me anyway. "No." I replied shyly. He laughed, it wasn't a mean laugh. It was more like a friendly, nice to meet you laugh. "What's your name?" ... my heart jumped. Why was he being so nice to me? What if I make a fool out of myself? What if---- "Kylie. Kylie Simmones." I managed to gag. "Kylie." He repeated. The way he said it, seemed so lovely. He said it slow, making sure to pronounce every little word. "Kylie." He said again. "I like that name." He smiled. I blushed and uttered... "Wh-whats your name?" He shrugged and said "Brandon". Could this actually be happening. Me, Kylie Simmones talking to this popular gangster? |
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| *iNyCxShoRT* |
Nov 19 2005, 09:50 PM
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Wow =] thanks for reading it all. Yeah,
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Nov 20 2005, 08:03 AM
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![]() <3 ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 3,657 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 64,493 |
that is so good. great job
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Nov 22 2005, 03:40 PM
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![]() i've never wanted anything rationale. ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 8,449 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 19,045 |
Thank god he didn't die. I probably would have screamed, waaay too many stories like that.
Good job, just a few like punctuation errors. Other then that, I liked it. |
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Nov 23 2005, 12:35 AM
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![]() What a hypocrite. ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 2,754 Joined: Apr 2005 Member No: 128,150 |
That was beautiful. (:
I wish the same was true for popular guys at our school, but they're not like Brandon. Too bad though, eh? |
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Nov 23 2005, 07:10 PM
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Nov 23 2005, 08:00 PM
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![]() High Voltage!∞ ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Official Member Posts: 4,728 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 29,157 |
I loved it. I also thought that he was going to end up dying & all...but it was a great story
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| *iNyCxShoRT* |
Nov 24 2005, 11:05 AM
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^ Thank you, everyone. For your opinions on it. I'm glad you guys actually took the time to read it all.
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Nov 28 2005, 11:40 PM
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![]() live life to the fullest <3 ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 97 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 101,474 |
That's good. Good thing he didn't die.
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| *iNyCxShoRT* |
Nov 30 2005, 10:06 PM
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^ Eh, I figured it would kill the story if it did end up like that. And it wouldn't be really realistic, ya know?
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Dec 18 2005, 10:48 PM
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Yawn ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 9,530 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 65,772 |
Oh wow! That was a great story! lol
"Brandon. Brandon. ---What the hell was his last name?" ^lol i laughed at that part too. =) But yah it felt real and bittersweet. Very nice :) I loved it. |
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Dec 21 2005, 09:03 PM
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QUOTE(KissMe2408 @ Dec 18 2005, 10:48 PM) Oh wow! That was a great story! lol ^ I'm glad that there was a little humor in there for you "Brandon. Brandon. ---What the hell was his last name?" ^lol i laughed at that part too. =) But yah it felt real and bittersweet. Very nice :) I loved it. |
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Dec 23 2005, 10:02 PM
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Sounds sexy. >___< i'm sorry. Haha. Your story ending is alot different from other story. It's a good thing.
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Dec 27 2005, 01:57 AM
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I gave you everything ... ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 81 Joined: Dec 2005 Member No: 334,433 |
so romantic
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Feb 17 2006, 11:50 PM
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Feb 25 2006, 12:51 AM
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![]() "lal! laugh a little!" ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 192 Joined: Jan 2006 Member No: 364,863 |
Hmm....I wish my life was like that...but instead of Brandon it would be a particular somebody....
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Feb 25 2006, 12:54 AM
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^ good luck with that, Sierra.
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Feb 25 2006, 01:26 AM
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![]() I like it like that ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 1,248 Joined: Mar 2004 Member No: 5,961 |
I loved it! It's so sweet. Brandon kind of reminds me of my best friend. I loved reading it, it just reminded me so much of him and I'm glad that even though it didn't work out we could still be best friends. And i'm glad it worked out that way in the story, even though they didn't end up together.
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Feb 25 2006, 03:21 AM
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![]() High Voltage!∞ ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Official Member Posts: 4,728 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 29,157 |
Haha..I started reading it and I thought..."Hey..why does this sound so familiar?" Then after I read it over again, I realized the date. Anyways, I STILL love it,lol. It's so..refreshing and it gives me hope, for some reason.
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Feb 25 2006, 03:47 AM
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I loved it! It's so sweet. Brandon kind of reminds me of my best friend. I loved reading it, it just reminded me so much of him and I'm glad that even though it didn't work out we could still be best friends. And i'm glad it worked out that way in the story, even though they didn't end up together. ^ Aww that's really sweet. This story was actually something from my experience. With a LITTLE twist. |
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Mar 1 2006, 07:09 PM
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<3 ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 185 Joined: Jan 2006 Member No: 365,309 |
Wow
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