5 on the 5, A short writing exercise Options

[FREEcandies]

I had to do a small writing exercise that really helped me appreciate the use of verb for descriptions. We tend to use (and overuse) adjectives when describing a scene, but verbs also make great descriptions when used correctly. If you want to, the exercise is to write a 300 word paragraph describing something without any adjectives. Here's mine:

5 on the 5

The clock says 5:00. My eyelids drip down, replacing the numbers with darkness and coating a layer of moisture over my eyes. Outside the window, the sun glares on the pavement, scorching all that is not protected by shadows. Its radiance causes water vapors to rise and sway, mesmerizing any gaze that falls on them. The engine drones on, playing its tune of weariness; it is accompanied by a hundred others. A symphony of cars is thrumming, sending out waves of fatigue. My chest rises as I inhale a waft of air that comes with the smell of exhaust and asphalt. The knowledge of the harm is overpowered by tiredness. From my forehead a bead of sweat creeps down. It lurches down the contour of my nose and hangs on for its life at the tip. I then realize that there are a number of other beads waiting for their chance at the journey. With no warning, a yawn forces my mouth open and fills my eyes with tears. My arm wipes away the haze and I blink a few times as the focus comes back. The clock says 5:01.

It's just a minute of my hour long commute..hehe.

[ChasingLife87]

Hey, I'm impressed!! I read the actual writing before I read the little intro you gave it, and I was impressed, then I read about how there's no adjectives, had to read it again, and was FLOORED.

I might try that sometime!!

[FREEcandies]

Thanks for actually reading! I was starting to give up all hope of anyone who likes writing. Seems like all the posts here are poems. Poetry isn't the only form of writing. Give it a shot, it's quite fun.

[ichiban]

deleteee, i posted in the wrong topic. sorry

[*salcha*]

Mmm the imagery is absolutely amazing in this. I love how you put this, I should try this sometime.