Let Me Cry, poem |
| *torngemini* |
 Sep 16 2005, 06:25 PM
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I want to cry
But the tears won't come. I closed myself for so long I just don't know how to feel. Emotions so held in, Shut so tight ... My hands are trembling, Scattering all through my body, But I still can't cry Please let me cry The lights are down, The air is so cold. I'm all alone with a pain So unbearable that I want to die. It won't make me leave it all behind But I still can't cry Please let me cry. Sleepless nights, Dry eyes so wide To images of things I don't want to see It's breaking me, It's taking over me But I still can't cry Please let me cry. I will do anything, I will give anything, Just let me cry Please ... Let me cry ... |
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Sep 16 2005, 07:08 PM
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 Some 1 plz find me, help me find my way..my way bak 2 bliss  Group: Member Posts: 288 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 1,748 |
there r so many days i feel like tat
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Sep 16 2005, 09:27 PM
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 Senior Member Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 4,799 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 37,450 |
I love this, really. Good job.
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| *stephinika* |
Sep 16 2005, 11:15 PM
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well written, i like it. i like the concept behind it too. keep up the nice work.
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Sep 17 2005, 12:41 AM
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 Yawn Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 9,530 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 65,772 |
QUOTE The lights are down, The air is so cold. I'm all alone with a pain So unbearable that I want to die. It won't make me leave it all behind ^love that part. exactly how i feel. I think you did an amazing job with the poem and really expressed yourself here. You did a great job, and please keep writing |
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Sep 18 2005, 04:21 AM
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 I'll never be who I was again.. Group: Member Posts: 2,886 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 77,981 |
Omg..
That is exactly how I was feeling.. Everything you wrote, I felt the same thing..  scary..
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Sep 18 2005, 05:40 AM
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 WarPath Leader. Group: Member Posts: 668 Joined: Aug 2005 Member No: 216,721 |
I like the way you're pointing out your feelings,
Very well done, Its sad but nice. |
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Sep 27 2005, 08:34 PM
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 some reason i feel alone...guess cus my true self is never shown Group: Member Posts: 303 Joined: Sep 2005 Member No: 246,804 |
so sad
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Oct 4 2005, 04:26 PM
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SOS Brigade!! Group: Member Posts: 2,573 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 47,775 |
Nice on how you poured yourself out in just a few words. Many people can relate to this I'm sure =P.
Nicely done with the wordings. I think they were put perfectly in place to get a full blast of the poem. |
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Oct 8 2005, 03:46 PM
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 the one lol Group: Member Posts: 92 Joined: Oct 2005 Member No: 253,183 |
thats how i feel sometimes...
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