Hopes and Fears, .. |
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 Jul 27 2005, 11:55 AM
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 ¡vá-monos!  Group: Member Posts: 58 Joined: May 2005 Member No: 138,712  |
Please give me constructive criticism.. I need to write a piece for school and this one took me a long time because I kept on checking over it, but I feel there is something missing. Thank you.
Hopes and Fears By Cherie D. You’ve given me all I had to hope My heart is melting, it’s on the ropes Everyday I’d hope for you to embrace me Make me feel your warmth and security Everyday I’d hope that it’d be true The day you said I love you You’ve given me all I had to fear For I hold you quite dear Life would be devoid of purpose if I love you You’ve shown me friendship like I never knew Its doesn’t matter what you do I still have every reason to care for you Being with you won’t make me tope or bring me to tears You are my hopes… You are my fears… And I would give anything to have you here Anyone? Sorry..I just needed some feedback |
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Jul 29 2005, 06:16 AM
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Oooo me likes... Good job
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