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Friendship, poetry
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post Jul 10 2005, 05:39 AM
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Another ditch in the road... you keep moving
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dead?
or just rotten
to the core
to the bone
marrow
with the stench of evil
evil?
or the absence of love?
neglect hurts like a fist
but without pain
can we heal?
let's heal
a friendship cant sink
according, interestingly
to Friends
but damn we can hit those icebergs
so climb of the boat and sit on the iceberg
and drift on a frozen sea with me
 
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post Jul 10 2005, 11:34 AM
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sorry. i drowned your fish.
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i really like the ending ^.^ great job! _smile.gif
 
Sa-Chan
post Jul 10 2005, 11:45 AM
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Crying Behind Blind Eyes
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You're a great poet. You just keep the reader wanting more, and then it ends, and it ends well.
 
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post Jul 10 2005, 02:55 PM
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wow i really, really like this one. it flows soo well and the concept is great. fabulous ending too. thumbsup.gif awesome work as always james.
 
sharerol
post Jul 10 2005, 06:04 PM
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that heaven is overrated
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QUOTE(stephinika @ Jul 10 2005, 12:55 PM)
wow i really, really like this one. it flows soo well and the concept is great. fabulous ending too. thumbsup.gif awesome work as always james.
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I agree...and James, I just adore your style of writing. Great job on this poem! _smile.gif
 
RiddleMeWonders
post Jul 10 2005, 09:56 PM
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fell in love with a boy
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QUOTE(MarchHare2UrAlice @ Jul 10 2005, 5:39 AM)
neglect hurts like a fist
but without pain
.....................
but damn we can hit those icebergs
so climb of the boat and sit on the iceberg
and drift on a frozen sea with me
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I really got this.. and I wish I could "drift on a frozen sea" a lot.

Excellent work. *Shakes her head, eyes closed* No.. I really think it's real. Real is Good.
 

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