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[Paradox of Life]

I swear, this is the worst piece of crap I've ever written.

[[Deep]Thought63]

flowers, hmm.. good poem.

[laxumaster8]

I decided to try writing lyrics for the first time in my life because I was thinking about being in a band. Hey, you there. Stop laughing.
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Where Are The Flowers?

Dreaming of lush green meadows,
Is that the only thing on my mind?
The sweet fragrance of a rose,
But this land I’ll never find,

Perhaps one day I’ll open my eyes,
To see the flower petals,
To see the blue of the skies,
My mind can never settle,

I keep thinking it’ll happen,
But it won’t

(chorus)
But the grass is dying,
Deprived of its sweet water,
The blades are broken, lying,
In a field of blood and slaughter,

Why can’t I find this paradise?
Why is everything being consumed,
By this miasma of black?

Dreaming of something nice,
Yes, that’s what’s on my mind,
I’m dreaming of this paradise,
This land I’ll never find,

For this is merely a vision,
Merely just a fantasy,
How long must I remain in prison?
Before I’m released into ecstasy?

(chorus x2 fade)
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Critique appreciated. Unfortunately, I have no songwriting experience. It's a remix of this poem I wrote a while back.

who's laughing?...*slap!*...nice...i like it...great job, keep up the good work