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 Jul 5 2005, 02:46 AM
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 fell in love with a boy  Group: Member Posts: 523 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,965  |
When I was a little girl
I acted the way you'd think I'd act now. And now it's quite the opposite I act the way you might see a little girl act. I'd much rather take a nap, or use a coloring book than go to another stupid party where everyone knows everyones secrets come monday at school. I don't have to succumb to the facts that graduation is looming 4 semesters away right now but I suppose I should get it together And give up my daises to trade them in for a portfolio college applications and diving into forever. I'm afraid. I admitt it. I do not want to grow up. Times like these I desperately wish I could fly to never never land but thoughts like that are ridiculous. All I have to do is look at the prince of pop to know You can run away from responsiblity but it catches up to you anyway I'd give anything to keep my daises if only for another year, another week or just another day. |
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Jul 5 2005, 02:55 AM
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 creepy heather Group: Official Member Posts: 4,208 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 41,580 |
thats pretty cool. the rhythm throws me off though, and with such a catchy phrase as giving up my daisies!
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Jul 5 2005, 03:17 AM
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fell in love with a boy Group: Member Posts: 523 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,965 |
QUOTE(Heathasm @ Jul 5 2005, 2:55 AM) thats pretty cool. the rhythm throws me off though, and with such a catchy phrase as giving up my daisies!  I must admitt it started with the daises. I've not yet surrendered the phrase only to this piece. Also, the voice is indignant, firm. |
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Jul 5 2005, 09:01 PM
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very nicely written. i love the concept too...very well done.
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Jul 5 2005, 09:04 PM
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 d@niel Group: Member Posts: 1,267 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 91,453 |
wow
 really enjoyed it...it really expresses the real feelings inside...like the title too...thanks for sharing!
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Jul 7 2005, 01:24 AM
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 Yawn Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 9,530 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 65,772 |
Nicely done :) I really like your concept about giving up daises, and trading them in. Never growing up, never wanting to grow up..but it's inevitable. THe poem is very honest and straight out there. I think it's fantastic :) Keep on posting more :)
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Jul 7 2005, 02:28 AM
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creepy heather Group: Official Member Posts: 4,208 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 41,580 |
QUOTE(RiddleMeWonders @ Jul 5 2005, 3:17 AM) I must admitt it started with the daises. I've not yet surrendered the phrase only to this piece. Also, the voice is indignant, firm. hahaha yeah i know exactly what you're saying. id deffinately save the great line for a better piece though |
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Jul 9 2005, 01:20 AM
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Mr. Hottie Group: Member Posts: 406 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 104,225 |
it sounds good.
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