Angel Eyes, Poem |
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 Jun 30 2005, 11:09 PM
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 Crying Behind Blind Eyes  Group: Member Posts: 257 Joined: Mar 2004 Member No: 7,967  |
Yeah, kind of...sadistic poem.
---------------------- Forsake me, With your angel eyes, Sweet incubus, Sweet devil. Forget me, Berate me, Kill me, As I cry alone. Throw me out, Into hailstorms, And blizzards, And unclean snow. Hit me, And abuse me, Toss me to the side, To pick me up and use me. Blame me, And maim me, And I'll apologize every time, To your sweet, angel eyes. |
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Jul 1 2005, 01:29 AM
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wow. well written...almost reminds me of something i'd write, with the same style and short lines and whatnot. i really liked it though. great words and it flows nicely. nice concept too.
keep up the good work. 
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Jul 1 2005, 04:39 PM
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mood: content Group: Member Posts: 2,063 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 42,325 |
:( Another sad poem, but I like it. It has a good flow like ^ said. Sounds like it would be a good song.
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Jul 1 2005, 10:45 PM
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Brie Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 10,172 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 20,548 |
*agrees with Steph*
What a great beginning! I love it. Great, great job.
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Jul 2 2005, 05:06 PM
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 LunchboxXx Group: Member Posts: 1,789 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,810 |
pretty BA.
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Jul 3 2005, 09:46 AM
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 My name's Katt. Nice to meet you! Group: Member Posts: 3,826 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 93,674 |
Ooh, I really like this one and you're such a good writer. I love the concept, but it seemed a bit abrupt and short. I wanted to hear more.
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Jul 5 2005, 10:40 PM
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 The Lost Dreamer Group: Member Posts: 67 Joined: Jul 2005 Member No: 166,502 |
I like it very much. It got the point accross suddenly and was well written. Good choice of words too.
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Jul 7 2005, 10:02 PM
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 sorry. i drowned your fish. Group: Member Posts: 1,485 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 98,683 |
^ i agree good choice of words
thats very nice. KEEP UP THE G00D JOB!! 
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Jul 9 2005, 12:00 AM
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Mr. Hottie Group: Member Posts: 406 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 104,225 |
sadistic, almost like a charitic angel
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