To S_____, With Love |
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| *RockizLife* |
 Jun 24 2005, 10:51 PM
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To S____, With Love
I'm writing this to tell you I really want you to know I'm here for you in everything you do Don't feel you have to put on a show Be yourself and chase your dream Don't let anyone bring you down I'll always be here through lifes crazy scheme To erase that lonely frown To S____, with love Please spread your wings Soar like a dove Fly right by lifes depressing things Maybe one of these days I'll catch up to you We'll cross ways For you, theres nothing I wouldn't do When you fall I'll be here No need to call I'll wipe away every tear Remember to soar with his guidence from above I conclude this letter, To S____, With Love © Brenden Noll |
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Jun 26 2005, 03:02 AM
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 My weakness is that I care too much. Also that I love you with a  Group: Member Posts: 55 Joined: Apr 2005 Member No: 130,426 |
That was beautiful. I love it totally. Its very expressive and beautiful. Would you like to see one of mine?....that's ok if u dun but I would liek someone's opinion on this
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Jun 26 2005, 03:53 AM
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wonderful wonderful, just wonderful. lmao.
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Jun 28 2005, 03:42 PM
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Touching.
Great job. And what's with the "lmao" from you?^  It was wonderful.
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Jun 28 2005, 05:22 PM
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 Crying Behind Blind Eyes Group: Member Posts: 257 Joined: Mar 2004 Member No: 7,967 |
This is sweet. Good job.
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Jun 29 2005, 03:32 AM
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My weakness is that I care too much. Also that I love you with a Group: Member Posts: 55 Joined: Apr 2005 Member No: 130,426 |
I love it very much u dun min dif put one up in here do ya?
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Jun 30 2005, 02:12 AM
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 My name's Katt. Nice to meet you! Group: Member Posts: 3,826 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 93,674 |
QUOTE(gothicdork @ Jun 29 2005, 2:32 AM) I love it very much u dun min dif put one up in here do ya?  Everyone's welcome to post in the Writing Forum. I love the repetition of the title, but you really should put "Dear Anonymous" or "Dear beloved" or something so it doesn't just look like a blank or typo. Or in my case.. another word  'I'm writing this to tell you I really want you to know I'm here for you in everything you do Don't feel you have to put on a show' Somehow that stanza is just awkward to me. I love the rhyme scheme you used and it's really tough sometimes to make appropriate rhymes for them, but you did an excellent job. Keep up the excellent work! 
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Jun 30 2005, 12:29 PM
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 <33 Group: Member Posts: 2,745 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 114,234 |
awesome, awesome work! it rhymed like every verse, lol.
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Jun 30 2005, 01:09 PM
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Aww, that's sweet. Good job. =)
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Jun 30 2005, 01:35 PM
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Thanks everybody. I'm glad everyone enjoyed it!
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Jul 9 2005, 01:41 AM
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Mr. Hottie Group: Member Posts: 406 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 104,225 |
good writing!
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