Catfight, A hiss, a scratch, a growl |
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 Jun 8 2005, 08:43 PM
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 My name's Katt. Nice to meet you!  Group: Member Posts: 3,826 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 93,674  |
Haven't written much lately...
Catfight Ablaze with cold fury, These two gleaming eyes, Staring at two others, Two he did despise, Their tails upright and tense, Their fur like needle tips, Their sharp teeth bared, their weapons, Like poison, saliva drips, Feline brows are furrowed, Staring each other down, No game, no sign of merriment, Bloodthirsty, malicious frowns, Then one leapt at the other, A hiss, a scratch, a growl, A feline yowl of agony, A sound so very foul, The dust arising from the bricks, Bloodstains on the tile, One is lying on the ground, The victor adorns a smile. "Let this be a lesson, My silly former rival We are strays, no rules, you see? I'm better fit survival." Constructive critisizm appreciated. 
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Jun 8 2005, 08:47 PM
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 ticktock. Group: Member Posts: 1,138 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 118,235 |
i like it. nice choice of description <- did that make sense?
QUOTE The dust arising from the bricks, Bloodstains on the tile, One is lying on the ground, The victor adorns a smile ^ my favorite part |
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Jun 8 2005, 11:23 PM
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nice. i like your descriptions and whatnot. great work.
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Jun 9 2005, 01:09 AM
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great imagery =).
btw isn't there a song named this?? |
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Jun 9 2005, 01:35 PM
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My name's Katt. Nice to meet you! Group: Member Posts: 3,826 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 93,674 |
Thanks for posting and I googled it. Catfight is the name of a band and a video game.
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