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 Jun 1 2005, 10:25 AM
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 fell in love with a boy  Group: Member Posts: 523 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,965  |
Don't look at me like you don't know what's going on
you've seen the way he's acted around me you've seen the way he whispers in my ear, and I smile you've noticed how I make sure he's around when you are you've heard me say his name in intention to thank you- For opening a door, or pulling out my chair. And you ignored it I see the reason you've furthered this, your pain To the others it doesn't make any sense, but I know why. You wanted someone to claim and sought to take me Who would be at your beck and call and not question any excuse I didn't want to be her, but you didn't care In your mind you deserved what you wanted You'd grab my wrist and put your hands on me Making sure everyone could see, making sure they saw what you wanted them too And they would tilt their heads and say how cute, and thought "He's saved her," Not knowing you don't want to save me; you want to kill me. But I knew. I don't know how to escape you now. |
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Jun 1 2005, 04:17 PM
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 Bardic Nation Group: Member Posts: 1,113 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 38,059 |
seduction in predator/prey relations. I like the subtelty of your straight forwardness. You said what was going on, but hinted at so much more. I can see a sequel.
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| *stephinika* |
Jun 1 2005, 06:59 PM
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wow, very nice. i love the concept and just the way its put together. i also agree with sikdragon's comment....great work.
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Jun 3 2005, 07:00 AM
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fell in love with a boy Group: Member Posts: 523 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,965 |
I think I do have a sequel coming up... thanks for the idea!
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Jun 4 2005, 01:49 AM
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whoa very emotional. great imagery. i can imagine all of this stuff. one quetsion though.....fact or fiction?
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Jun 4 2005, 08:12 AM
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fell in love with a boy Group: Member Posts: 523 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,965 |
Like most things, a certain degree of it spawned from fact and was changed into fiction.
This could have been a relationship I might have had. Thankfully, I do not have it. |
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| *Kathleen* |
Jun 6 2005, 12:55 PM
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From the poem, the title seems extremely appropriate.
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