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 May 29 2005, 01:38 PM
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Senior Member  Group: Member Posts: 148 Joined: Dec 2004 Member No: 68,934  |
Copyright to me. Lol.
It's just difficult to move on, Reminiscing the good and bad, The times of friendship we have had, Those memories forever gone. Times we have spent without regret, The moments we thought that would last, The ones we will never forget Are missing now, lost in the past. For this love was not forever, We just were never meant to be, Together again is never, But finally, you and I are free. Constructive criticism is welcome. It's dedicated to a few friends of mine whose relationships haven't worked out quite well. It's a pretty amateur poem, and I hope I'll improve soon enough. I'll be writing more like these. Thanks. |
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May 30 2005, 03:16 AM
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 I'll never be who I was again.. Group: Member Posts: 2,886 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 77,981 |
wow its good..i like it..good job!
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May 30 2005, 09:00 AM
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Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 148 Joined: Dec 2004 Member No: 68,934 |
Thanks nekochan1018.
 I'll probably move on to other "depressing" poems. Any ideas? Is rain an overused poetic topic?
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May 30 2005, 10:13 AM
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 The Best Thing Since Instant Soup Group: Member Posts: 815 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 104,928 |
It's good but it sounds like a Simple Plan song...
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