"My heart still desires you", 1st time |
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 May 21 2005, 04:56 PM
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Senior Member  Group: Member Posts: 88 Joined: May 2005 Member No: 137,907  |
hey! ok so this is the first time i start a topic in writing
 so i hope you guys like my stuff. it aint all that.. but i like to express myself!  "my heart desires you" My heart still desires you but my mind says no what should i listen to? with whom shall i go? You did a very bad ting, very shameful indeed But my heart still desires you because you are my soul's need. Why wont you leave? Get out of my heart? I must turn my head away before the real obsession starts I cant seem to forget you How can i get you out of my head? To you i must resign... and pronounce your love dead. so how you like it?
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May 21 2005, 09:28 PM
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 boo Group: Member Posts: 5,512 Joined: Dec 2004 Member No: 71,765 |
That's really nice, I can feel the emotions.
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May 22 2005, 10:19 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
QUOTE(Chyn020 @ May 21 2005, 1:56 PM) My heart still desires you but my mind says no what should i listen to? with whom shall i go?  Thats true i like that part in your poem, you catch emotional moments that can happen in reality and i'll assume your poems are based on life-expirience? well whatever the case very well done. |
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May 22 2005, 11:00 PM
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 High Voltage!∞ Group: Official Member Posts: 4,728 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 29,157 |
I love it!
 It's so deep. That's how I felt a week or two ago. Beautiful poem
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May 22 2005, 11:13 PM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 345 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 108,641 |
awsum awsum!!
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May 22 2005, 11:14 PM
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 skaters gonna skate. Group: Official Member Posts: 6,861 Joined: Mar 2004 Member No: 6,336 |
QUOTE I cant seem to forget you How can i get you out of my head? To you i must resign... and pronounce your love dead. aw . good part. good poem |
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May 24 2005, 04:19 AM
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QUOTE(Chyn020 @ May 21 2005, 4:56 PM) To you i must resign... and pronounce your love dead. I <33 that part. so i am guessing this is about a break-up,eh? well anyways, it seems very real =) |
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