Love kills...., check out this literary piece i made! |
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 May 4 2005, 11:37 PM
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 come and get me!  Group: Member Posts: 190 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 113,600  |
Smile. Unmask the clown with thorns
Kiss. Lust, looking at the devil's eyes Chocolates. Glutton, bittersweet illusions Red roses. Angst, blood dripping and silent cries Love letters. Lies, blank message of dread Ring. Envy, false gold locking dreams Heart. Hatred, each angel dies Her. Soul in suicide Him. Naked, sitting alone, happiness gone Us. Faded smiles and hidden wraths End. Death knocks, please take my hand |
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May 4 2005, 11:46 PM
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 reluctantly gazing Group: Member Posts: 472 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 120,555 |
it's a nice poem, i like how its written. and the structure of it. nice job
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May 5 2005, 09:04 AM
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 The Evil_Pillow Shall Rule ALL! Group: Member Posts: 4 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 66,593 |
I really like how it's written. The way the unbolded words describe the bold words. Great Job!
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May 5 2005, 03:36 PM
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 banned Group: Member Posts: 1,589 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 3,768 |
Wow... that spiked me
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