stabbed a thousand times, random song Options

[x LUV x ALWAYS x]

EDDDITT: Changed a few words or so
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Yeah, I wrote this once when I was particularly pissed off at someone.
No, it wasn't my boyfriend or anything, but since most of the songs I listen to are about some kind of relationship or another, most songs I attempt to write end up about a relationship.
Have fun:

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Rocks tumble down around me
Seemingly avoiding me to mock me
Kill me already, I couldn't care less

All the words I say amount to nothing
But what's kept inside is never heard at all
It's harder to explain when no one understands

I've said everything I can
And yelled until my voice ran out
Take me away from this hell or kill me now

I don't care what you try to do to me anymore
You've already stabbed me a thousand times
I can't take it anymore
It's crazy how much it hurts when I think of you
After all you've done, can you make it though
See what you've changed your life into
I've been stabbed a thousand times by you

Everything's about to break apart from the root
It's all gonna crumble down around me
When everything's destroyed I'll be the only one standing

Because I've already been stabbed a thousand times
The knife may be covered in a layer of my blood
But the knife's been in my heart for so long it doesn't matter now

I don't care what you try to do to me anymore
You've already stabbed me a thousand times
I can't take it anymore
It's crazy how much it hurts when I think of you
After all you've done can you make it through
See what you've changed your life into
I've been stabbed a thousand times by you

And you wonder why it doesn't affect me
You of all people should know
I'm pretty much immune to all the things
That are said to me lately
And I'm pretty much safe from all the hell
That's aimed to me
Because I've already gone through it
Stabbed a thousand times

I don't care what you try to do to me anymore
You've already stabbed me a thousand times
I can't take it anymore
It's crazy how much it hurts when I think of you
After all you've done can you make it through
See what you've changed your life into
I've been stabbed a thousand times by you
Stabbed a thousand times by you
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[crashingg]

oh wow. thats pretty deep. your a good writer!

[Paradox of Life]

Wow, that's really deep. It's not just some complaining poem about wanting to commit suicide or something, you actually state some incentive of your anger which is good because a lot of us can relate. I love the title and the concept.

'I actually don't care what you try to do to me anymore
You've already stabbed me a thousand times
I can't take it anymore
It's crazy how much it hurts when I think of you
After all you've done can you make it through
See what you've changed your life into
I've been stabbed a thousand times by you'

I like the chorus. For some reason I think you could've worded it a little better. I'm not sure if you're trying to rhyme or not because if you are anymore and anymore don't rhyme. The last 4 lines of the chorus are really good though. Keep up the good work

[x LUV x ALWAYS x]

Thank you both :)

"For some reason I think you could've worded it a little better. I'm not sure if you're trying to rhyme or not because if you are anymore and anymore don't rhyme."

Oh, oops. I didn't start writing the chorus assuming that I was going to make it rhyme but I decided to rhyme it after those first two lines. I forgot to go back and make those rhyme too. My bad. Also, I forgot to take out the "actually" from each chorus.

//edit : i went through it and took out the actually-s. but i think im going to keep the first two lines of the chorus the way it is, unless i think of a really nice change.