english buffs...i need help!, BIG TIME! plz read! |
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 Apr 27 2005, 06:58 PM
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 i <3 peter  Group: Member Posts: 744 Joined: Apr 2005 Member No: 125,986  |
k well i did a biiig long story for english class 3 pages long, (its about kip and lafawnduh from napoleon dynamite, hehe) and my friend says she thinks i wrote it in the 2nd person, and my friend* told me our english teacher told her that we couldn't write in 2nd person because its the "wrong way to write a story" or something. read this part of my story and plz tell me if its 2nd or 3rd person??! thx!!
QUOTE Kip and Napoleon took all of their traveling bags, while Lafawnduh and Deb talked. "So what do you do?" asked Deb. "I'm a cosmetologist!", said Lafawnduh. "Wow, that's great!", she replied."And what do you do?" asked Lafawnduh. "Still doing the glamourshots?". "Yeah, we have gotten a lot of business lately! Maybe later I could get a portrait of you and Kip together!", Deb said. "OK, that would be great, thanks!", said Lafawnduh.
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Apr 27 2005, 07:01 PM
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 jellyfishing, jellyfishing Group: Member Posts: 1,174 Joined: Oct 2004 Member No: 55,185 |
That's third person, you did it correct.
 First person=I, me, myself, etc Second person=you, your, yourself, etc Third=they, them, she, her, etc |
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Apr 27 2005, 07:52 PM
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i <3 peter Group: Member Posts: 744 Joined: Apr 2005 Member No: 125,986 |
thx u very much!! yay! :D
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Apr 27 2005, 08:09 PM
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 ich heisse Meli. Group: Member Posts: 909 Joined: Apr 2005 Member No: 122,016 |
The only thing is that you need to, every time a new person starts talking, you need to start a new paragraph.
For example: QUOTE Kip and Napoleon took all of their traveling bags, while Lafawnduh and Deb talked. "So what do you do?" asked Deb. "I'm a cosmetologist!", said Lafawnduh. "Wow, that's great!", she replied. "And what do you do?" asked Lafawnduh. "Still doing the glamourshots?". "Yeah, we have gotten a lot of business lately! Maybe later I could get a portrait of you and Kip together!", Deb said. "OK, that would be great, thanks!", said Lafawnduh. It looks a bit tedious, but that way you are positive who is saying what! |
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Apr 27 2005, 08:27 PM
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 The Bone Collector Group: Member Posts: 2,860 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 44,162 |
QUOTE(KERP1UNK @ Apr 27 2005, 7:52 PM) thx u very much!! yay! :D  I think this question was answer (: So I'm going to close it. - CLOSED - If you need more help or disagree with the closing, feel free to PM me. |
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